Disclaimer : Mga simpleng alam ko lang ang nasa blog na ito. Compilation ng mga naalala ko pa from my college educ pero kung me additional info kayo or correction, palagay na lang sa comment at I will add it here accordingly. Wag sana tayong troll. These info are posted here for TOPpers and writers from TOP. If you are neither, feel free to be high and might somewhere else. Ktnx.
Here we go.
Minsan kasi more more dialogue lang sa story. This is not ok.
Remember
that there should be more SHOW then there are TELLs in your story.
When you state a fact that is a TELL when you describe the
surrounding and the emotion of the characters or make them move a
certain way to show how they are really feeling versus the dialogue
then you give the reader a mental picture, that's a SHOW.
It's
ok to make it long muna then shorten it later. But if your narrative
lacks visualization
mejo bulag din ung reader mo. Kulang sila sa kakayahang MAKITA ang mundong
sinulat mo. Remember that THEY CAN NOT READ YOUR MIND. Sa isip nating
mga writers
malinaw nating nakikita ang mundong ginagalawan ng ating mga
characters BUT unless
na isulat mo iyon sa narration mo, hindi un malalaman ng readers.
Maraming mga writers lalo na online na tinitipid ang mga narration ng kanilang kwento. Bad un. I personally write lang mga scenes na sunud-sunod ang dialogue pag me sense of urgency sa conversation nila.
Usually
script like dialogues happen when the people talking are doing it so
fast
that
the reader must read the dialogues right after each other.
i.e.
fictional - away
"I
don't understand this. Why would you do this?" naiiyak na tanong
ni Ruru kay
Scott.
"Because
you are lying to me!" galit nitong sagot sa kanya.
"I
am not lying to you!"
"You
are!"
"I'm
not!"
"Then
tell me that you are not in love with my cousin! Tell me and I would
stop
hurting.
I would stop hurting so much that I want to hurt him too."
Natahimik
si Ruru sa sinabi ni Scott. She didn't know that he knew about her
feelings.
"Tell
me that you don't love him and I would stay."
"I
can't..."
Kitang-kita
niya ang paglaglag ng balikat ng dating minamahal. And it tore her
heart.
Hindi niya inakalang masasaktan niya ito ng ganun ganun na lamang.
She was
hurting
too. Pero hindi pwedeng paasahin niya ito sa wala. Nalilito man siya
sa
nararamdaman
niya para kay Toshi pero alam niyang hindi na niya mahal si Scott.
Akmang
hahawakan niya si Scott pero naglakad ito patalikod para iwasan siya.
One
step
back that ended her resolve. He was giving up on her, nakikita niya
sa mata
nitong
wala na itong gana pang ipagpatuloy na ipaglaban ang relasyon nila,
ang
damdamin
nito.
"I'm
sorry, Scott."
"You
should be." pagkuwa'y tumalikod na ang binata at tuluyan nang
nawala sa
kanyang
buhay.
***if
you notice the script like parts are for rapid and very emotional
scenes most
of
the time. It is necessary for the lines to be read right after each
other
because
the narration breaks the flow of the emotion. So don't do this
script- like
thing
unless in a similar situation
ie.
dying person
"Don't
leave me." naiiyak na usal ni Sasha.
"I'm
sorry I can't stay..."
"Don't
leave me...please, Josh! Josh, please...please don't die."
"I'll
love you..." napa-ubo ito pero nagpatuloy pa rin, "...always."
dahan-dahang
bumagal
ang paghinga nito.
"Josh..."
Bumuka
ang bibig nito na wari ba ang nagsasabi ng always
"Jooooooooooooooossssssssh!"
hindi niya matanggap na wala na ito. Always meant
nothing
kung wala na ito sa tabi niya. Always was just another broken promise
like
forever.
