Saturday, June 22, 2013

MULTILINGUAL CHARACTERS

Disclaimer : Mga simpleng alam ko lang ang nasa blog na ito. Compilation ng mga naalala ko pa from my college educ pero kung me additional info kayo or correction, palagay na lang sa comment at I will add it here accordingly. Wag sana tayong troll. These info are posted here for TOPpers and writers from TOP. If you are neither, feel free to be high and might somewhere else. Ktnx.

HERE WE GO.

HOW TO DEAL WITH MULTILINGUAL CHARACTERS


Kung English ang ginamit na language no need to say that it was said in English. If the sentence you wrote is in Filipino kasi in general ang conversation nila is in *insert whatever foreign language your character speaks*, ok lang not to mention it after that. Adjusted na sa isip ng mga readers mo that the characters are speaking in *that foreign language* after you mention it once na they are speaking in that language to each other. 

*established na that si BB Bidang Boi ay Korean*

example:

"Ano bang problema mo sa akin?" sigaw nito sa sariling wika. 

"Marami! Maraming marami akong problema sa iyo!" sagot niya sa kaparehong wika. 

"Ano nga?" angil ni Kevin. 

"Maraming maraming nagkakagusto sa iyo. Nasasaktan ako." sinisinok na sagot niya. 

Tila natameme ang lalaki sa sinabi niya. Saka dahan-dahang nilapitan siya nito. Di siya makatingin sa mukha nito kaya't sa Doc Martens nito siya nakipag-usap. "Hindi ko na kayang magtiis. Gusto ko akin ka lang."

Naramdaman niya ang pagyakap nito sa kanya. "Pabo. Ikaw lang ang sarang ko. Sila, ssaeng fans lang. Ako. Ako lang ang may bias sa iyo. Sila tagapalakpak lang." 

Kailangang ilagay sa narration in italics ung translations ng mga foreign words and sentences. Pero shempre kakamatay na isulat un in that language then use Filipino.
Mention the shift in the language only if the Filipino dialogue was meant to be in
another language.

fictional example : The man is Korean. The woman is American.

"Shibal!" napamura si Yongji sa sobrang galit. "Hindi ko alam kung pano ko pang
ipapaliwanag sa iyo na wala akong relasyon sa babaeng un." patuloy nito sa sariling
wika.

"What did you just say to me?" hinarap ni Sara ang binata. "Wag mo akong ma-Hangul
hangul na lintik ka dahil baka ikaw ang magkanosebleed kapag nag-English ako ng
diretso." sa sobrang inis ay hindi na niya napansin na nag-Hangul na rin siya.

"Sorry ha, kapag lasing o galit na galit ka nga lang pala magaling mag-Hanggul.
Fine. I'll speak plain. How many freaking times do I have to tell you that I don't
have a relationship or never had one with that woman? I love you. I have a
relationship with you! Gets mo na?"

***TRILINGUAL characters or bilingual characters are hard to deal with. And you
need to remember your readers ALWAYS. Make your story readable and understandable.
Romance is a nobrainer read. But that doesn't mean your readers are dumb. But
romance should be an easy read not a JRR Tolkein one.

Romance is in POPULAR Filipino. 70% if not 80% if it should be in Filipino.


SHOW VS TELL : HOW TO NARRATE YOUR NOVEL

Disclaimer : Mga simpleng alam ko lang ang nasa blog na ito. Compilation ng mga naalala ko pa from my college educ pero kung me additional info kayo or correction, palagay na lang sa comment at I will add it here accordingly. Wag sana tayong troll. These info are posted here for TOPpers and writers from TOP. If you are neither, feel free to be high and might somewhere else. Ktnx.


Here we go.

Minsan kasi more more dialogue lang sa story. This is not ok.

Remember that there should be more SHOW then there are TELLs in your story. When you state a fact that is a TELL when you describe the surrounding and the emotion of the characters or make them move a certain way to show how they are really feeling versus the dialogue then you give the reader a mental picture, that's a SHOW.

It's ok to make it long muna then shorten it later. But if your narrative lacks visualization mejo bulag din ung reader mo. Kulang sila sa kakayahang MAKITA ang mundong sinulat mo. Remember that THEY CAN NOT READ YOUR MIND. Sa isip nating mga writers malinaw nating nakikita ang mundong ginagalawan ng ating mga characters BUT unless na isulat mo iyon sa narration mo, hindi un malalaman ng readers.


Maraming mga writers lalo na online na tinitipid ang mga narration ng kanilang kwento. Bad un. I personally write lang mga scenes na sunud-sunod ang dialogue pag me sense of urgency sa conversation nila. 
Usually script like dialogues happen when the people talking are doing it so fast
that the reader must read the dialogues right after each other.


i.e. fictional - away

"I don't understand this. Why would you do this?" naiiyak na tanong ni Ruru kay
Scott.
"Because you are lying to me!" galit nitong sagot sa kanya.
"I am not lying to you!"
"You are!"
"I'm not!"
"Then tell me that you are not in love with my cousin! Tell me and I would stop
hurting. I would stop hurting so much that I want to hurt him too."
Natahimik si Ruru sa sinabi ni Scott. She didn't know that he knew about her
feelings.
"Tell me that you don't love him and I would stay."
"I can't..."
Kitang-kita niya ang paglaglag ng balikat ng dating minamahal. And it tore her
heart. Hindi niya inakalang masasaktan niya ito ng ganun ganun na lamang. She was
hurting too. Pero hindi pwedeng paasahin niya ito sa wala. Nalilito man siya sa
nararamdaman niya para kay Toshi pero alam niyang hindi na niya mahal si Scott.
Akmang hahawakan niya si Scott pero naglakad ito patalikod para iwasan siya. One
step back that ended her resolve. He was giving up on her, nakikita niya sa mata
nitong wala na itong gana pang ipagpatuloy na ipaglaban ang relasyon nila, ang
damdamin nito.
"I'm sorry, Scott."
"You should be." pagkuwa'y tumalikod na ang binata at tuluyan nang nawala sa
kanyang buhay.


***if you notice the script like parts are for rapid and very emotional scenes most
of the time. It is necessary for the lines to be read right after each other
because the narration breaks the flow of the emotion. So don't do this script- like
thing unless in a similar situation

ie. dying person

"Don't leave me." naiiyak na usal ni Sasha.
"I'm sorry I can't stay..."
"Don't leave me...please, Josh! Josh, please...please don't die."
"I'll love you..." napa-ubo ito pero nagpatuloy pa rin, "...always." dahan-dahang
bumagal ang paghinga nito.
"Josh..."
Bumuka ang bibig nito na wari ba ang nagsasabi ng always
"Jooooooooooooooossssssssh!" hindi niya matanggap na wala na ito. Always meant
nothing kung wala na ito sa tabi niya. Always was just another broken promise like
forever.




  


POV and Voices

Honestly I don't know what they are called officially but for this part let's just call POV the general way the story is told. In TOP novels it's best to place them in The 3rd person or the Niya POV.

Then there is the person whose "voice" or point of reference is used for the said chapter. *that is not the official name for it pero I am sure someone would correct me and I can change that later.

Reminder : MAX of TWO voices in the story. The Bidang Girl - BG and the Bidang Boy - BB.

Pero minsan gusto ng writer me 2 voices sa isang chapter pero isa dito hindi si BG or BB. Pero dapat the world in the story revolves around the BG and the BB lang. Kung papano nila nauunawaan at nakikita ang mundong ginagalawan nila ganun dapat. UNLESS me pangyayari na revealed lang sa reader para magprogress ang story. At usually iyon ay para naman umusad ang aksyon. Para malaman ng readers na nasa panganib ang mga characters o magreveal ng mga possible obstacle sa buhay ni BG at ni BB.

DAPAT SA UNA PA LANG NAKAPILI KA NA kung sinong pinakabida mo si BB ba o si BG. para ung voice na ang dominant sa story mo.

EXAMPLE:

NAKITA ni Ruru ang pagkapanalo ng manlalarong nasa bandang kanan. Narining niya ang
sigawan ng mga fans nito.

"That's my cousin!" sigaw ng kanyang kasintahan. Kita sa mukha ni Scott na proud na proud ito sa pinsan. Lumapit ito sa kanila saka nag-bow ng parang naka-90 degrees, tanda ng labis na paggalang sa Japan. Nag-bow rin siya dito bilang pagbati.
"Ruru, this is my cousin Toshi, Toushiro Yamagi. Toshi, this is by beloved Ruru, Rusandra Montenegro soon to be Greyson." naramdaman niya ang pagpisil ng kasintahan sa kanyang balikat nang akbayan siya nito.
HINDI maintindihan ni Scott kung bakit tila kakaiba ang nararamdaman niya mula nang lumapit ang kanyang pinsan sa kanila ni Ruru. Malapit siya sa pinsan niya at ito ang lagi niyang kinakamusta sa mga kapamilya kapag nasa Japan siya. It could be the way that he was looking at her o sadyang kinakabahan lang siya tuwinang may humahanga sa kanyang nobya.
Pero dahil na rin sa nararamdaman niyang iyon, napagpasyahan niyang ituloy na ang proposal niya mamayang gabi. Mahirap na ang may makasingit pa. Kahit na pinsan pa niya hindi niya mapapatawad kapag dumiga ito sa kanyang minamahal. Ruru is his and he was hers for keeps.
NANIKIP ang dibdib ni Toshi nang makita ang pagpisil ng pinsan niya sa balikat ni
Rusandra. Kilala niyang hindi possessive sa mga babae ang pinsan pero mukhang iba na itong si Ruru. Sinubukan niyang hindi mahalata ng pinsan na hindi niya nagustuhan ang PDA nito kaya't nakangiti pa rin siyang humarap ulit dito. "Mukhang na-starstruck na si Toushiro!" biro ng kanyang coach.

Teaser Example : Crimson Love

This is just an example
Check the HOW TO HERE to get more info 

Ever1 : (EIC version one) Example with a question in the end - Le Hook
Toushiro Yamagi fell for Rusandra "Ruru" Montenegro after meeting her in Tokyo Japan. Ruru was caught between Toshi's (or whatever his nickname is) persistent love and the respect she had for her boyfriend, Scott Greyson, Toshi's cousin.

Would she risk her heart with Toshi or stay with Scott's comforting arms?

Ever2: Example with a declarative sentence where the main character needs to make a choice between two people or two really bad situations.
Loving two men was never a part of Ruru's plans. She was perfectly fine loving Scott Greyson and had been dreaming of turning Rusandra Montenegro to Rusandra Greyson soon. That was before Soctt's cousin Toushiro Yamagi came into her life.

Now she needs to chose which one to keep, the man who loved her or the man who made her heart beat fast again.


Ever3: Example with lines from the story
Toushiro Yamagi was caught in a rock and a hard place. The woman he loved is his favorite cousin's girlfriend. Rusandra Montenegro was a proper lady, the kind that was for keeps. But how could he keep her in his life when she was never his in the first place?

“G-give me back my kiss.” maktol na sabi pa ni Ruru kay Toushiro.

"Don't worry, I'll give it back with interest."

I hope this was able to help you! <3 




Saturday, June 1, 2013

HOW TO POST FAQ

DISCLAIMER : We are still beta testing TOP Talk so this can change at any time.


How to Post in TOP Ver. 2013 

Ask yourself if you are a plagiarist. Nangongopya ka ba ng idea o akda ng iba? If you are. Wag ka nang sumali at baka kung mapano ka pa dito.

Ang taong nangongopya ng akda ng iba for personal reading or reposting it sa ibang lugar for other people to read kahit na ba me name ng writer ay hindi allowed sa TOP. Ang author lang at TOP ang pwedeng magpalaganap ng kanilang sinulat.

Confraternity ito ng mga taong galit sa plagiarists. At mga mahihilig sa pocketbook of the Tagalog Romance genre.

Click here TOP Talk Forum this is as of june 2, 2013 still in beta testing.
TAGALOG ONLINE POCKETBOOK this is the official site where you can get to read using gils or donation turned into gils. You can earn gils when you read and comment. You can log in using your FB account or you can use the code

Kapag member na kayo ng Forum at the site, if you have gils na, use it to read. But my suggestion is you :

1. Activate your user muna for the TOP Talk.

How : Go to your email na ginamit for registration. Then make sure to activate or verify na ikaw talaga ang nagregister. Follow the instuctions there.

2. Magbasa ng read me ng TOP talk to get the idea of how you can be get to the point na pwede ka nang magpost ng thread.

READING THE READ ME IS MANDATORY. MAGBASA BAGO MAGTANONG. READ ME

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Sabihin na nating ok na, nakapagpost ka na. User ka na.

There are things to remember :

1. ALWAYS HAVE A BACK UP COPY OF YOUR STORY. 

Hindi natin controlled ang technology. So always save a copy of your story in your email. Make this the email you use for TOP para naman match. Or if OC ka then make an email just for saving your stories. JUST DON'T FORGET THE PASSWORD and visit it once in a while.

Why do you need this?

Para kung magkasystem issues tayo or what not hindi lost forever and stories mo. Sh*t happens. Remember that.

2. PROOFREADING is not the EDITORS job. It's your job. 

Ikaw na may-akda ang me trabaho niyan. Read, check for typos and grammar mistakes before posting your teaser, chapter and what not.

BASAHIN ANG MGA HOW TO SA SITE NA ITO PARA HINDI NA TAYO MAGKAPROBLEMA LATER ON.

TOP CHAPTER FORMAT
HOW TO WRITE A TEASER

REMEMBER: DO NOT SEND A FIRST DRAFT or post it. Do not PM the EIC and the Editors your chapters without their consent. It is your JOB as the writer to have already checked your work before you send it. We are doing this for love and not money. Hindi pa ako nananalo sa lotto. If that ever happens magfufulltime EIC ako. Pero sa ngayon na I have a day job and we have editors who do not do this for a living, please do understand that it may take time for us to read your work.

3. MAJOR OVERHAUL can happen for PREMIUM EBOOKS

Ebooks for TOP found here

KAPAG ang work mo ay gagawin nang EBOOK ito ay sasalain ng editors, ni support at ng EIC. Maaaring makatanggap ka ng isang mahabang pdf kasama ng pdf na me corrections at pdf ng final version ng novel mo.

Kung hindi ka marunong tumanggap ng edits at corrections, you are in the wrong writing group. Magtayo ka ng sarili mo. Thanks and have a nice life. Or be a blogger. Or post it on Wattpad.

4. There are rules to follow on how to post 

See this rule that must not be forgotten:


This is a moderated forum.

All new threads are being reviewed first by our editors before you can see them. Use the proper prefix for your submission for faster approval process.

- Whole Novel > Post your whole novel in one thread (including cover photo, if available, and/or teaser)
- Teaser > Post your teaser only, does not matter if it's finished or unfinished.
- Per Chapter > If you want to get more feedbacks, follow this option. (i.e. Ikaw Lamang - Chapter 1)
- Unfinished > Share your incomplete story as well for feedbacks and future reference.

Nasa taas yan ng lahat ng genre.

Minsan ang mga teaser ay nagiging for approval. Pero once na mabasa at ma-edit na ito ng EIC then it would be ok'd

BTW, limited time na online and EIC so minsan at mods/editor ang makakaharap ninyo.

If gusto ninyo you can sent a PM to Pinaywriter
http://tagalogonlinepocketbook.com/talk/user-6.html

What can be sent?

a) Initial Draft of your Teaser with Title of the story.
b) personal PMs
c) Thanks you PMs
d) Report of bullying PMs

Tandaan for all other concerns deal with Foo and the Mods. Screenshot always para walang lusot kung me irereklamo kayo.

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HOW TO POST a Teaser 

HOW TO MAKE A TEASER 

Three paragraphs Four sentences each rule = 12 sentences max


How to post a Teaser in TOP TALK forum















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HOW TO WRITE A CHAPTER

Tandaan na other writers and readers can read it when you post it for in TOP talk. They are your beta readers. When your work is popular and you finish it, then you can submit it in TOP read as an actual novel. Pero dapat nabasa at nacommentan na ito ng isang editor at ng EIC. ^.^

This may take some time but it will help you get feedback on your work before it becomes an Ebook or a TOP novel officially.

All EIC edits are mandatory to listen to. And changes must be made on the novel.

Sa mga lumang writers baka magulat sila na they will get this on their novel.

*+* This chapter has officially been read by the EIC of TOP*=*

That means na naoverhaul or na-edit ko na ang work nila.

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HOW TO POST A CHAPTER in TOP TALK 

1. Choose the right Genre 

Right now we have Short Stories, Romance (duh), Action, Scifi, Horror, Drama and Others for not included genres. I write Fanfic but it's Romance so I put it under the Romance category.
2. Similar to posting a teaser only you choose PER CHAPTER if you are posting one chapter at a time or WHOLE NOVEL if you finished it then want to post everything in one go.

3. Paste the URL of your Chapters on the TEASER Thread like so.








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FOR TOP WRITERS this is the writing workshop in TOP Talk
Share what you can if you have any tips and such. 


MORE UPDATE to come. So Please say tuned.


If you have any more questions please leave your comment on this blog or PM me in TOP talk.